VALIS IS STILL ALIVE EVEN AFTER THE OFFICIAL HENTAI ASSAULT!

SuperSailor7 wrote:

I do agree in large part with the rants here, but for the sake of balance, I don't think we need to rail on this author like the devil and take advantage to promote our own fanfics. All I can offer is hopefully constructive criticism, if it takes a turn for the worst I drop it and that's it. I'm not conceited enough to claim I could do much better either. The quality of my work is for others to judge.

May be I've come off a bit harsh. However, I feel the characters shouldn't be at each other's throats all the time. I mean, for instance, Cham and Lena. From the impression I get from the PCE version of Valis 4, Cham may be protective (maybe overprotective) of Lena, but I can't imagine her labeling Lena as a "traitor". Also, Cham is the stubborn type, and would probably do whatever it takes to complete her goals (for instance: steal the Valis Sword from Yuko), but she is not the type to backstab her friends.

Another problem is Leigh has never met Yuko, although she probably had seen her through her scrying.

The third problem, is the person has mixed up some of the characters. As I pointed out before, the person used Lada's picture for Rogles. Now the person's calling Leigh "Zalude".

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Now I'm curious about what kind of exchange took place between EvilReiko and this author. I was assuming they were going to go over these criticisms in their PMs, but I really don't see any evidence in the videos so far.

I'm curious too. I just wonder if I should somehow comment, and how I should frame it.

iannafei wrote:

May be I've come off a bit harsh. However, I feel the characters shouldn't be at each other's throats all the time. I mean, for instance, Cham and Lena. From the impression I get from the PCE version of Valis 4, Cham may be protective (maybe overprotective) of Lena, but I can't imagine her labeling Lena as a "traitor". Also, Cham is the stubborn type, and would probably do whatever it takes to complete her goals (for instance: steal the Valis Sword from Yuko), but she is not the type to backstab her friends.

Another problem is Leigh has never met Yuko, although she probably had seen her through her scrying.

The third problem, is the person has mixed up some of the characters. As I pointed out before, the person used Lada's picture for Rogles. Now the person's calling Leigh "Zalude".

Sounds like a big, fat, giant, "DUH!" to me! Those were my other problems, and I see I'm not alone in those. Which further proves my last couple statements. A real fan, would at least have a real good idea as to what he was writing about! This doesn't seem Valis to me.

Oh, one detail I forgot to mention about the male lead. I don't have anything wrong against old guys, really, although I first thought he would be a lot younger than he is, but it might have been an interesting twist. A bit out of place maybe, but an interesting twist.

But GEE WHIZ! What a stinking, pervert! Both of them! The character, and the Author! I mean come on! The guy is clearly older than , I don't know how old, but I think without a single hint of brown or black in his hair or beard, he's clearly in his seventies or something. And what does he have him do? Talk about gross! Even though it was then made obvious that such a relationship was smashed, but still! Him, and Cham? Major, Eewwwwww, BLEEEEHHH! And *BLLLARRRRGG*! The guys stinking old enough to be her grandfather, or father, and he thought he had a chance with her? Pardon me while I puke at the concept, as it makes my stomach hurt just thinking about it!

SuperSailor7 wrote:

Now I'm curious about what kind of exchange took place between EvilReiko and this author. I was assuming they were going to go over these criticisms in their PMs, but I really don't see any evidence in the videos so far.

Mega Man model T 101 wrote:

Yeah, I was kind of wondering that myself. I think it was fixed, maybe and one episode, and then he went back to his old style. I'm sorry if I technically ranted how bad his stuff is a lot, but I felt like I wasted time trying to watch the whole thing through. So last video I watched, I skipped a bit, and I don't think I missed much, other than people flying off into tantrums for no real apparent reason.

iannafei wrote:

I'm curious too. I just wonder if I should somehow comment, and how I should frame it.

Everyone's waiting for my reply
He's actually a nice guy

In brief..

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He said he will try his best with his drawing skills (and I believe he did good job with his skills.. even some backgrounds can be noticed was spent sometime to work on)

About the story, he's obviously not a professional story/fanfiction writer. Making all characters look angry,evil,etc. because he likes this type of characters, although it's wrong to make all the characters in the story like that Any non-professional writer will do this mistake easily, and it's not easy to get all characters personalities correctly.

Anyone have watched the anime "Scrapped Princess"? Almost all the characters in that anime have nice/kind/pure-hearted characters even some anime story-writers do this mistake

for example, I'm pretty sure nobody knows what/how thinks/feels as much as I do, while I have no idea what/how thinks/feels!
For example, what iannafei said is just new to me about :

iannafei wrote:

May be I've come off a bit harsh. However, I feel the characters shouldn't be at each other's throats all the time. I mean, for instance, Cham and Lena. From the impression I get from the PCE version of Valis 4, Cham may be protective (maybe overprotective) of Lena, but I can't imagine her labeling Lena as a "traitor". Also, Cham is the stubborn type, and would probably do whatever it takes to complete her goals (for instance: steal the Valis Sword from Yuko), but she is not the type to backstab her friends.

because iannafei is a fan of

Most difficult thing about writing a fanfic/story is: getting all characters personalities correctly + twisting events with these characters for the story You may think it's easy, but if you try, it's very difficult (but not impossible). it requires a professional story-writing skills

About mixing characters, that's few ignorant-type of mistakes but it's not very bad mistakes (like mixing.. who's and who's )

iannafei wrote:

The third problem, is the person has mixed up some of the characters. As I pointed out before, the person used Lada's picture for Rogles. Now the person's calling Leigh "Zalude".

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Overall, with his drawing skills and story-writing skills, he's ok... at least he managed to get me thrilled at some points ... and one more time I have to say.. it's better than Valis X

Nicest thing so far said is this , we should help each other to be better :

SuperSailor7 wrote:

I do agree in large part with the rants here, but for the sake of balance, I don't think we need to rail on this author like the devil and take advantage to promote our own fanfics. All I can offer is hopefully constructive criticism.

Huh...



I think I have too much free time in this holydays...

EDIT: Link to Pixiv:

http://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=7652051

The only difference is the logo (Japanese Valis logo in Pixiv "ヴァリスSD")

That's nice work!

"The Legend of a Pocket Soldier"

Hilarious!

Thanks, and well... NEVER is late to receiving a gift like this!

Valis XMAS: Yuko

Spoiler:

in Soul Calibur IV